My dad: Sarah, I found the best part of your essay to be the penultimate paragraph about the gap between care provided to ICU patients as compared to those who are not in immediate danger. You could strengthen your case for better balance by pointing out how more attentive and thorough care for "normal" patients could avert crises and deterioration and reduce the need for intensive care in the first place.
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What I said:
Arden- "We are all in the same boat, faced with the scary idea of limited living time, talking about death, accepting it I think makes it easier." I really liked this line and how you presented it. I agree with what you're saying.You are a very good writer, my attention was grasped as soon as I started reading.
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