Sharif,
I thought the way you compared the two different hospitals and interviewed college students was really interesting. It seemed to me that only one of the students knew what she was talking about but the rest were pretty uneducated. I really liked the part where the one kid said "what's a cesarean?" because it showed just how much some people know about the topic.
I wanted to read your blog after your elevator speech because it seemed to me that I had a connection to it. College students are not very far in age from us so it was intersting to see that we knew more than they did about birth in general.
I liked your video, but the audio could have been better. (and the baby was really cute).
Devin,
Your project on the timing of when to cut the umbilical cord was very specific and fascinating. The benefits of waiting just one minute are quite incredible and it's a wonder why doctors don't do it more often. I think the topic you chose was interesting because it's not something people think about very often. Most of the time, especially on TV, the umbilical cord is cut right away and that's that. I'd never thought about whether that was the right thing until I read your blog. Good job!
Liz,
Your topic on same-sex adoption was one that I hadn't seen in anyone else's projects. Your interviews with two different points of view allowed some light to be shed on how people think. While it was a pretty small amount of interviewees, I think people can still get a sense of why because of your clarifications or inner monologue throughout the essay. I alos enjoyed the way you started off the piece. It sounded really cool and grabbed my attention quickly.
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Comments to me:
Renee (mentor):
childbirth can be one of the most difficult experiences any woman goes through - even in the most supportive of circumstances...
IF society has any intention of prison affecting rehabilitation - wouldn't it be in the woman's best interest to make that experience, at the very least - humane?
Ben H:
Your choice to focus on the mistreatment of pregnant women in prison was a very interesting and unique one.
This topic is important to observe primarily because of how many people do not even think about it, as you stated in your project. Although it is hard for me to personally relate to it, your project was still important to me because my eyes were opened to a completely different area of pregnancy and birth that I had never even thought about myself.
I really liked the way you were able to include multiple real-world situations for a topic that was so specific and rarely spoken of. If you had been able to find more statistics, that would have made your point even more convincing. Good job!
Arden H:
I agree that giving birth is not a easy process for a women. Pregnant women in jail are not given close to what is required for a safe and successful birth.
The stories you chose to incorporate are gruesome and almost hard to believe. Consider it cliche but people are people. it is inhumane to treat a person, in prison or not with such incivility. the stories you shared both throughout your paper and in your elevator speech were a good addition to further proving your point. it grasped the persons (me) attention, because it seemed so unreal.
I appreciate your research about such an unpublicized and overlooked topic.
Natalie:
In this piece you describe the lack of care pregnant women in jails receive due to neglect.
I liked the way you incorporated women's personal stories into your writing in order to create a much more vivid image.
This topic is extremely important, mainly due to the fact that so little light is shed upon it. People do not really think to consider the pregnant women in jail. While there is a reason for them being there (usually), it is no reason to treat their child badly. Many times in pregnancy fetus and mother are see as one entity, however in this case I believe it is best to view them as two separate beings.
Perhaps next time you could propose how you think this should be changed.
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